I Can Do It…
The immersive narrative design
In The 2nd version script
I made some changes to my script.
Delete all dialogues from Ali.
Viewers play as Ali should be guided by ginger man.
If there are any recorded dialogues represent Ali could probably decrease the sense of embodiment.
START
Description
This part of the story is from Line1 A3.
Ali went back home and the ginger man told him the truth.
Outside House, when Ali came back
EXT – DAY OUTSIDE OF ALI’S HOUSE
Even though it was daytime, the scene still looks like night
time because of the huge black skydome.
Ali arrived at his house. We can see the scenery around the
house.
Ali saw the ginger man sitting on his doorstep. As Ali
getting closer, the ginger man noticed him.
GINGER MAN
((stands up, seems happy)
Oh! You’re back! I’ve been waiting for
you for 4 hours.
GINGER MAN
You should welcome me.
I’m still standing in front of you.
You see, a complete and healthy man.
Take me inside, I’ll tell you what
happened.
Ali entered the door, the ginger man followed him.
Inside House
INT – DAY LIVINGROOM
Ali and ginger man got into the house. The house was dusty，
the plants withered. Ali opened the windows, patted the dust
off the chairs. Ginger man sat on the sofa.
(Viewers can walk around in the living room)
GINGER MAN
I guess, you don’t want to see me,
right? hahaha.
The less you want something to happen
the more likely it is to happen.
GINGER MAN
Yeah, I’m really sorry.
GINGER MAN
I’ve always been alive. I never blamed
you. I’m really happy that you come
back safely.
Those giants didn’t hurt you right?
balcony
INT – DAY BALCONY
Ginger man walked to the balcony.
GINGER MAN
Come here.
Ginger man asks the viewer to go to the balcony. Outside the
balcony, the city was still brightly lit and gorgeous, even
though it had been out of the sun for months.
GINGER MAN
What a lovely city.
That day, when I leave your house, I
went to the river, take a boat home.
The surrounding environment began to change, it was no longer
a city, but a river. There is a boat on the river with 2
people on it, one is boatman, another is ginger man.
GINGER MAN
I had a very happy chat with the
boatman. The boatman said that my
basket and silk are very beautiful and
wanted to buy them. So I agreed.
Something I was leaving the boat,
something floated on the river. It was
a corpse.
The river fades out, a street appears.
GINGER MAN
The boatman took my basket, silk and
the corpse find you, told you I was
dead. He asked for money from you,
then, he went to the police station,
reported you, and received the rich
man’s bounty.
You were taken to prison, and you
would definitely be chosen to go to
the giant’s house.
The scenery outside the balcony restored to its previous
appearance.
A short silence.
GINGER MAN
Almost forgot! I brought you some
snacks
Ginger man walked to the living groom.
Suddenly, someone outside the house shouted:
What’s that! What’s that!
Ali and ginger man looked outside, in the distance, there was
a huge beam of light was shooting to the sky.